What you have definitely sounds like vocal abuse or voice abuse. If your voice is coming primarily from your upper throat, then you are pushing too hard. And, your voice will disappear in a crowd, for example, because that area of your throat doesn’t have the power to give you any volume. Many who are soft-spoken are pushing from there. If you use your chest as your primary sounding board, however, your volume will increase automatically. In addition you will be able to increase your volume to Level 2 without shouting or hurting your throat. Yes, my training, Voicing It!, takes you through the whole process. Plus, I am here for you if you have questions or just want to talk.
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Overall, this is an excellent start to a compelling essay. Keep in mind that although the committee allows you to write up to five pages, three double-spaced pages is usually adequate. Feel free to add more detail, but make sure your text is concise and transparent. You might consider "writing" ideas and then "rewriting" them. Too often, authors put ideas onto the page, but do not render those ideas compellingly. Giving your sentences a bit of extra effort, and giving your experiences a bit of extra reflection, will result in a persuasive essay that compliments your accomplishments and character.